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• On April 2, 2007 at 12:10 pm d.e. wrote:

  uh, eww! i’m off to take a shower now.
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• On April 2, 2007 at 12:32 pm J. Bryan Shoup wrote:

  The word “dukedom” is somewhat unpleasant in and of itself.
  This reads somewhat like a piece of Spam I’ve gotten recently.
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• On April 2, 2007 at 1:38 pm Brian Hadd wrote:

  There is not a lot of kinetic energy. I like the form though. The final phrases are the only area where I see the poem moving forward. As I said though, the phrases themselves are beautiful.
  The Hood Company
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• On April 2, 2007 at 10:27 pm J. Bryan Shoup wrote:

  Hrm.
  He demonstrates by storm the properties of his echoes,
  by example the heaviness of his spiders.
  He wraps me in his art du bonheur,
  in his protocols and grammars,
  his guilds of water, in the gallantry
  of his mistakes, and in the diagrams of his purgation.
  And then the poet inhales two lungs of clove and puffs it in my face. Maybe it’s me, but every turn of phrase that grabs me (and there are a few in particular that make me envious), there are two that make me wonder if she was just stringing impressive words together at random.
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• On April 3, 2007 at 2:50 pm Catherine wrote:

  It’s too easy. If I read a line like, “Flags snap in pride, but pride flags in the fire” I’m expecting sarcasm, wit something more self-aware on the line level following.
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• On April 4, 2007 at 10:52 am Brian Hadd wrote:

  The flag line is not the best. I am envious of the weight of spiders, demonstrating by storm the properties of an echo, and the use of a language I don’t know.
  The Hood Company
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